What do you think of my story?

I'm sorry. It sucks. No better way to put it. The beginning is terrible and the writing is so boring. There are way too many ellipsis, which, by the way, are only 3 periods long. It's so unrealistic and there are too many brand names (the airlines). When you have a character yell, don't put it in caps. And Kaje is a really weird name. Why is she only 10?